You want to apply to a private college seeking admission for a bachelor degree. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment and cannot get admitted to the college without some help.

Write a letter to the Principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available.

Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

STUDENT RESPONSE:

I am writing this letter to seek admission in Bachelor of Science, and I would like to enquire about the financial assistance available for students who are struggling to afford their college fee.

YOUR PRIMARY CONCERN IS TO BE ADDRESSED. HERE THE PRIMARY CONCERN IS FINANCIAL HELP.

BETTER VERSION:

I AM WRITING TO INQUIRE ABOUT ANY FINANCIAL ASSISTANCE TO ENROLL IN A UNIVERSITY PROGRAMME AT YOUR COLLEGE. I AM A CANDIDATE WHO WISH TO ENROLL IN THE BIOLOGY STREAM.

STUDENT RESPONSE:

I would like to give you some of my background information. I am a recent pass out from the high school and my major was in Biology. I have scored 3.72 GPA out of four. Recently, my sister went through a major surgery which sank my family to a great debt.

YOU DO NOT NEED TO WRITE THE FIRST SENTENCE.THE LAST SENTENCE IS GRAMMATICALLY WRONG.

BETTER VERSION:

I COMPLETED MY HIGHER SECONDARY SCHOOL WITH 3.72 GPA OUT OF FOUR AND MY MAJOR WAS BIOLOGY. UNFORTUNATELY, A WEEK LATER, MY SISTER HAD TO UNDERGO A MAJOR SURGERY AND THIS HAS DRAINED OUR FAMILY’S SAVINGS CONSIDERABLY.THEREFORE, I WOULD LIKE TO GIVE ME INFORMATION REGARDING ANY SCHOLARSHIP WHICH CAN SUIT ME TO PURSUE MY STUDIES.

STUDENT RESPONSE:

I believe that I am an excellent student who have a threshold to pursue a great career. But I cannot afford my tuition fee because of my financial crisis. Hence, I would like to ask possibilities of financial help available for low-income students such as grant or scholarships to cover my fee.

THE THIRD QUESTION IS FOCUSED ON ANY OTHER FINANCIAL HELP.

BETTER RESPONSE:

I WOULD ALSO LIKE TO MAKE A QUERY REGARDING ANY OTHER SORTS OF FINANCIAL HELP IN CASE YOU HAVE NOT ANY SCHOLARSHIP SCHEME FOR STUDENTS WHO SEEK ADMISSIONS LIKE ANY SPONSORSHIP OR GRANTS.

 I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Edward Simon